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DickBook

Previous: https://desuarchive.org/trash/thread/55332702/

>Request, write, or share stories and provide feedback/critique when appropriate. All writers are welcome, SFW and NSFW.

>Instead of asking for interest or worrying about a fetish, just post your damn writing/request and see what happens. You might get lucky.

>Complaining about fetishes is dumb and stupid in /trash/. Use that negative energy for requesting, reading and writing instead.

>Please tag stories so readers know what they're getting into. Nobody can force you to tag stories you share or make. However, people are MUCH likelier to skip a work if there are no tags present.

>Feedback is always appreciated for posted stories, for author or reader!

/d/'s Master List: contains old stories, writing guides, and more
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ccAAmGecQiEE5ywZc4S4d1347WuMPEsF3DbSNAS4LRo/edit

Lewd Thesaurus shamelessly stolen from /flg/
https://rentry.org/lewdsesaurus

Request Dump: Find/Post requests here too
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1nyDKegfYhIvlv7ZvGoxswIVkiG5lw1lrOeDFvZbw_WU/edit?pli=1

General grammar tutorials and key notes
http://theeditorsblog.net/fularchives/
https://theeditorsblog.net/2010/12/08/punctuation-in-dialogue/
https://theeditorsblog.net/2014/04/08/keeping-adjectives-in-line/

Tips on Improving Prose:
https://jerichowriters.com/prose-style/

Sites to post stories/WIPS at:
ArchiveOfOurOwn
HentaiFoundry, SoFurry
Rentry
Ghostbin (Not recommended due to deletion of fics and random UI mixing)
4binz (will shutdown at the end of 2022 or 2023)
FF-net (fan works only)
Pastebin (not recommended due to NSFW takedowns and filters)
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Rentry
Ghostbin (Not recommended due to deletion of fics and random UI mixing)
4binz (will shutdown at the end of 2022 or 2023)
FF-net (fan works only)
Pastebin (not recommended due to NSFW takedowns and filters) 

Stories from Last Thread:

The Pack Grows
>https://rentry.org/The_Pack_Grows
>cw: Furry rape of humans. Men and women.

Vocation
>https://archiveofourown.org/works/46072447
>Yugioh, girl x bear, 2k

Hass has a Hell(jumper) of a time
>https://rentry.org/7uiqb
>Tags: 9,961 words M/F, Halo, Aliens, Covenant, Alien on human, Action, Beatings, Blood, Rape, Vaginal, Anal, Biting, Cumshot, Creampie, Kidnapping, Double penetration, Cum eating, Masturbation, Some submission to pleasure, Submission, Insectoid, Oviposition

Alfredine
>https://archiveofourown.org/works/46201936/chapters/116314525#workskin
>Angst, Psychological Abuse, Brainwashing, Electroconvulsive Therapy, Forced Nudity, Father Figures, trauma

Cursed Shoe Store Update
>https://www.deviantart.com/samaster/art/Cursed-Shoe-Store-Epilogue-956623555
>T/F, Bimbo

Link any that were missed to this post.

Old Stuff:

The General’s Lust (Digimon)
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11560815/1/The-General-s-Lust
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looks like I copy pasted wrong because I'm a moron. Remember kids, always look both ways before you ctrl+v
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Is there a word for whisper yell? Like that sound new streamers do when they want to scream but their parents are in the other room?
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>>55592980
I have fucked up similarly when making threads, don't worry anon.
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>>55593345
Stage whisper?
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>>55593345
Hissed? Growled? Rasped?
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>>55593713
That's the name? Weird.

>>55593852
I feel like those are a bit too aggressive. I'm using it for a scene where a character is surprised and embarrassed at something another character does but doesn't want to scold her at full volume.
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>>55593921
Muted yell?
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>>55593921
You could try describing it with prose instead of looking for precise word for it if none of the suggestions fit the way you want them to.
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I have the urge to fuck Cookie Girls again, and an update regarding one that visits dreams gave me an interesting idea. I'll post this one more time and then I'll think about commissioning it instead.

Requesting a Cookie Run story involving Moonlight Cookie visiting a human guy in his dreams, in an attempt to find a wizard to bring back to her world. Guy looks like one (human), but isn't and he declines, making her try to persuade him to come along anyway, even temporarily. When she promises that she can make one of his dreams a reality in return, that makes him panic to her confusion before she looks around in his dreamscape to find it. And then she went past the do not enter door, and she is exposed to a multitude of old dreams of him fucking other cookie girls (or simply just her if you don't know the series). Guy wishes to really wake up, but she interprets the intimate, yet scandalous human on cookie action as his loneliness, which she related to. Even if she was embarrassed, she decides to follow through with her promise, and with a hungry kiss, they too start fucking each other for real.
Tags are
>Vanilla,
>oral
>vaginal
>creampie
>short character (3-4 feet tall, stacked optional)
>handholding(?)
>Dream sex
Feel free to add more or less, although I'm more keen on keeping it a simple M/F story.

Her bio/details/dialogue:
https://cookierunkingdom.fandom.com/wiki/Moonlight_Cookie#:~:text=Moonlight%20Cookie%20is%20the%20second,Sea%20Fairy%20Cookie's%20eternal%20yearning
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>>55593345
Harsh whisper, or whispered harshly
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>>55594959
>>55593988
I like these a bit more than my original, thanks.

>>55594582
Yeah, I could try. I'd rather not resort to that because I'm using it on a scene in quick succession but I'll see now it goes.

Why is there no word for this anyway?
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>>55595346
Probably because it's such a specific example of speech that there is no need for one with how infequently it is used.
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>>55595411
I'd put money on a word for it in German.
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>>55595512
Ah yes, "Die Shoutzenwisper."
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>>55595346
Glad you like my suggestion. 
Eh, it's one of the oddities of English language. It has massive vocabulary, but forming entirely new words is often complex to the extent that even foreign words may become fully adopted instead - like 'Schadenfreude'. 
In some other languages making up new words is much more easier. But that is linguistics and I'm not too proficient in that particular field.

>>55595512
I think there are at least two words for aggressive or scolding whispering in Finnish.
Don't know German but >>55595641 seems legit.
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Requesting a story where five fat girls accidentally or get tricked into releasing an imprisoned demon army. The girls are not aware of what they've done at first, but a series of strange happenings in their town attract the attention of the goddess who originally sealed the demons and she enlightens them. To atone for their blunder and defeat the demons, the girls must seek out and master the powers of ancient dinosaur themed armor.

> magical girl, weight gain, belly stuffing, belly expansion, stuffing

There might be more or less tags depending on the direction of the story. I can also provide further details if a writer is interested.
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Went two weeks without writing and now I'm struggling to get writing again. Very disappointed with myself. Trying to get back into it but I keep procrastinating or simply staring at unfinished stories or outlines. Haven't even reread my outlines to catch myself up again.
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>>55599279
You'll get back into the swing of things.
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>>55599279
I have found that rereading whatever I've been working on from the beginning is an easy place to get started because it doesn't feel like writing, but I will always find a few things to adjust that get the ball rolling.
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>>55595641
>>55596158
Foreign languages that sound damn close to English seem like a strange limbo of fun and nightmarish to learn.
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>write almost 20,000 words over a marathon weekend
>gets progressively more depraved until I finally have to blow my load
>feel disgusted with what I have created
>save file to "never read' folder
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>>55609106
German is pretty easy, it's been years since I've done anything with it but I'm amazed how much I can still pick up from context. I'd never be able to carry a conversation without sounding like a drooling idiot, but I've had more "holy shit I know what they said" moments from movies/tv/vidya/whatever when somebody speaks in german.
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Wonder what Mouchi’s been up to?
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>>55611156
Posting in the cap thread.
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>>55611494
Haven’t seen him around there lately. I hear he’s been having irl troubles.
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>>55611518
That's usually what's going on with him. He's used his trip in the cap thread recently. If you want to ask about him I'd try there so he's more likely to see it.
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>still editing that painfully shitty futa harem fanfic
>expanded chapter 2 to over four times of its length to flesh out some interactions, avoid pov switches, and keep the characters in character
>actually considering sending it to the original author and see what she thinks
OOO WAH-AH-AH-AH
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>>55609196
How depraved did it get?
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>>55612451
Post it here at least. I'd be lying if I wasn't curious as to how it changed.
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>>55615399
I'll post some excerpts late.
I have to settle for a tense to use and then go around to fix it because I flip-flopped on it. I feel like first person present is best for smut but I slipped to first person past and third person past out of habit.

Honestly, though, I'm a bit afraid of seeming like I'm trolling her or something if she somehow finds out that I'm posting her stuff on 4chan. I'm way too old to do that shit and I'm not sure how old the original author actually is.
Though, I really doubt she would even set foot in this place, even by accident.
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>>55615568
*excerpts later
What a great editor I am. Fuck's sake.
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>>55615399
A 'good'-ish example would be the following.
There's this brief mess of a sentence I ended up I turning into an entire scene that's unironically too long to post in a single post. Excuse my shit prose, but I was more focused on fleshing this interaction. Maybe I'll try to improve it. I'll let my dick decide on that.

original
>[...[ after that (dance practice) they gone home except for nico and (y/n) they gone to the arcade they play different games and they played crane mashine nico really want the brown bear
>pic related is embedded around here in the original
>then (y/n) win it for her [...]

my version
>I waited for Nico on a corner by the street where all the arcades were. Nico came in a bit of a hurry. "Ready for our date?" Was the first thing Nico said to me once she arrived. She was panting and looked a little tired from practice. Though it was faint, I could smell her sweat from all the practice she just did. "How was practice?" I ask Nico, smiling at her as we entered the arcade, and she gave me an annoyed look and a frown. "It was like Eli was taking her revenge on me in advance." Nico says and I can't help but chuckle. "I wonder what is she planning. Does she like me as well?" I say and immediately Nico pouts with jealousy. "Hmph! Look at miss popularity here." Nico says and picks up her pace a little, walking in front of me. She then points to an UFO machine full of brown plush bears and points at it. "Make yourself of some use and get me four of those." Nico said with a stern tone. I really wasn't expecting her to be this fired up during our first date. 
>Looking at the UFO machine was a little daunting but not because of the money but the task at hand. I could easily be stuck in here forever. That Nico. Taking her anger on me. But I didn't mind it, she was cute enough to make me get over it. Besides, I wanted to get to the bottom of this. Why would Nico need four of those bears anyway?
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>>55616646
cont'd

>I get to work and I try pulling one of the bears with the crane, but the claws are so weak that it only barely inconveniences the bear. "What are you doing? Is this your first time?" Nico says, sounding pretty annoyed. "Y-yeah. I usually just order these things online." I say, a little nervous but also dismissive of this method of obtaining plushies. "Say, Nico-chan, why don't I—" I try to propose Nico the idea of just buying the bears online and she immediately cuts me off. "Don't you even dare to utter those words." Nico points at me with a burning stern look in her eyes. After I recoil from her reaction, I lean over the UFO machine's dashboard and sigh. Give me a break, this useless claw is a joke, I'm never getting any of those bears out. "I'll explain it to you, okay?" Nico says with a smile, a smile I had never seen on her. One that was supportive and warm, yet a teeny bit condescending. A smile that seemed to say that I couldn't do anything without her around. A smile that a mother would give to a clumsy child that has messed up so many times before.

>Nico then explains how these machines work. Normally, you'd think that the claw is supposed to do the job of grabbing the toy and bringing it to the hatch, but instead these UFO machines made it so the claw was so comically weak that you were supposed to make a multi-layered and multi-turn strategy to shove the toy you wanted ever so slightly into the hatch. It was good to have a better idea but doing this four times? This is torture. "Now that you know, analyze the structure of the bear pile. Make a plan. Use your head and win me those bears." Nico said as if she was a commander sending off to the battlefield, right before giving me a 'Rikka-chan' in her sweetest voice. Analyze? Use my brain? I can do that but this looks so daunting for a UFO machine newbie like me.
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>>55616762
cont'd

>The bears form a pile that goes all the way down to the bottom of the machine's pool. The hatch is at the level of the bottom of the pool. It's an odd arrangement but it gives me a clear idea of what to do. The plan is to focus on the bears resting loosely at the east face of the pile and push them with the crane until that section collapses into the hatch. If I play my strategy right, at least three bears should fall on a single movement after some turns of setup.

>I put a coin into the slot and the machine starts playing the brief tune that welcomes me into the task. My first few attempts are watched closely by Nico, who watches on with vigilant and serious eyes. For my first few turns, I only use the crane to push the bears at the middle of the pile and slowly break down the structure of the pile. I can see Nico nodding with a confident smile behind me through the reflection on the machine's glass. The next turn, the claws grabs a bear by its torso and for the first time it pulls it up, but by now both Nico and I know that this is nothing to get excited about. The claws are still too weak and only lift the bear a couple centimeters in the air before they drop the bear on top of a weak point of the pile. We both knew that this was our chance.
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>>55616803
end'd

>I angle the crane down towards a point of the pile where a pit had formed. The crane buries itself in it, not grabbing anything, but pushing the bears to its right side on its way up. Nico's eyes light up when she sees the pile of bears collapse over the hatch and drop five bears into the hatch. It took me over ten tries at the very least but I wasn't expecting it to go this well. Nico rushes to the door on the lower side of the claw machine and picks up her prize. "This one's yours." Nico gives me one bear as she hugs the small platoon of plush bears I won for her in her arms. I thank her and then I ask. "Can you tell me now why do you want four bears?" Nico seems a little annoyed by my question, but more than annoyed she seems worried. "Um, I just... Really like these bears." She definitely was hiding something from me.
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>>55616646
>>55616762
>>55616803
>>55616832
Just as a quick bump, and not to spam the thread with my shit, I also added a scene in which the self-insert chases Nico across the alleys behind the arcades until they stumble upon her younger siblings.
There was no mention of them in the original, which I found really weird, and Nico just went to the self-insert's mansion and stayed there to sleep right after their visit to the arcade. I guess the author knew very little about the series. A shame for her, really, because Nico's role as a big sister is one of her best traits.
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>>55616646
>(y/n)
That's...a new terminology for me. Is that how people are labeling self insert person nowadays?

I assume you also separated the dialogue when the characters are talking, but I see what you mean. The original, assuming it does jump like that, skipped what was essentially a pretty easy bonding experience and start to a date by jumping over the game. The example you wrote details that aspect of the date moreso, showing off the interaction and back and forth the two had, also giving Nico a hint more personality than her 'do this do that' personality she seemed to have started with.

There is a chance that the author may have just skipped the date to get to the lewd part quicker. I can understand that, but I usually don't agree with those kind of decisions. Because small things like that DO add up to give readers more of a reason for characters to bang, DOUBLY so if they don't really know the character all too well.

I root for your contribution to making something you like better.
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>>55618720
>Is that how people are labeling self insert person nowadays?
The idea is that you can use a browser extension to replace y/n with your name, which is... well, I once read a smut story that incidentally had my name in it and I can't imagine doing it deliberately.
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>>55618720
>That's...a new terminology for me. Is that how people are labeling self insert person nowadays?
Yeah. It stands for 'your name' so the person reading just fills in with their name in their imagination. It's a staple of the sef insert genre.
Though I do think they should just make a character they are comfortable with as a representaive of themselves and their audience and ditch the concept. I don't see myself in the self-insert most of the time so it's kind of pointless.

>There is a chance that the author may have just skipped the date to get to the lewd part quicker.
Which is weird because the first lewd scene is on the third chapter, though at the pace I am retelling this it would have landed at the fifth or sixth chapter but I don't think readers would've minded reading a scene like the one I just posted.

>I root for your contribution to making something you like better.
Like is a big word here but thanks, anon.

Really, I chose this one because the author picked Ichinose Shiki as the face of the self-insert and out of all anime girls I know by name she's the one I'd pick for turning into a futa and throwing at an idol anime cast.

>>55619032
There is a browser extension for that?
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>>55619032
Or just copy and paste it into a word processor and search and replace. Or use Calibre to search and replace within ebook formats.
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Okay, so here are the characters I'll be using in my next koikatsu story sequence. 

-Anyway lets meet the nerds. A very wholesome and innocent group whose interests include video-games, Ogres and Oubliettes, and of course, solving mysteries! Starting on from the right:

Search-Light: Originally a Pony (or at least he would be in Equestria), he's the lovable coward of the group. Often the first to advise the group just go back home and play video-games and the first to run at the sign of danger. He usually takes care of making sure the group has adequate snacks, and when adventuring their mystery solving gear (such as flashlights). Ironically he likes to play survival horror videogames. He serves as the team medic in tabletop games. 

Covert Clue (Cici): Usually the brains behind the gang helping piece together the clues that the others have found. A rather quiet girl who prefers to stay out of the spotlight, her mind is often busy at work analyzing the information the gang comes across. Enjoys playing twitch shooter video-games, and is on several top leaderboards. Roleplays as a paladin. 

Clawtooth Storm Hornswallow III (Tiny): A Dragon in Equestria. The leader of the gang, it's his van they use to take the nerds on their adventures. Usually he isn't much help in finding clues and solving the mystery, but he helps keep the group of nerds together and functioning well. He DM's for the gangs tabletop games, and likes to play simulation games about fishing and driving trucks.

Book Smart: Would be a Zebra in MLP. The philosopher of the group, he has several encyclopedia's worth of knowledge in his head, and while he tends to move and talk slowly, it belies the great breadth of his intellect. However given his tendency to go on long tangents and overanalyzing abstract concepts often leads him to miss the forest through the trees. Likes to play puzzle games, and serves the role as bard in tabletop games with a high charisma build. 
(cont.)
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>>55619324
Tremor Tear: Would be a Diamond Dog. The party tough girl, she likes dark gothic aesthetics, and tends to be the most enthused to look for ghosts and other supernatural figures, always hoping for a fantastic explanation to the mystery (and is thus an optimist always proven wrong). Tends to be the one to stand up for the group when someone tries to walk over them. Prefers to play fantasy RPGs with a dark aesthetic and plays as the party's as the mage.

Spring Squall: A Hippogriff in Equestria. The resident skeptic always looking for a rational explanation to a mystery. While she tends to be passive and lets others take the charge, she has quite the sharp tongue and wit. Tends to be the one who plays the bait when situation calls for it. Likes to play grand strategy games, but roleplays as a barbarian fighter. 

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It'll be a My Little Pony Bimbo-Horror Fanfiction themed around Resident Evil. It's going to be a wild ride. Major themes will be bimbofication, transformation, and goths. 

Our nerds here will be quickly picked off by the ravenous Pie Family, leaving one of them to go around the Pie Estate trying to rescue his compatriots and fighting off magically enchanted zombimbos (they aren't undead, just too horny to think, and kinda dehydrated).
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>>55618720
>I assume you also separated the dialogue when the characters are talking, but I see what you mean.
Oh yeah, that, I almost forgot, yeah.
It was actually pretty hard to read because the original is redacted like fucking Finnegan's Wake or some shit. Each chapter is a huge run-on sentence, so much so that it makes me welcome the terrible concept of cutting to another characters perspective with a "[character]'s pov" subtitle because only then she cuts a section apart into a paragraph.
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>>55619324
>>55619399
Seems simple enough, though the pictures imply even the guys may become bimbos? Does gender transformation tag also need to be added, or is there a male equivalent to bimbo?
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>>55620821
Yeah Himbo. Here are the eventual fates for each-

Tiny - Will be himbofied to Hulk proportions
Covert Clue - Will be partially dollified (very submissive, pale skin) but break free at the end, and find a super-bimbo serum that'll briefly make her about two and a half meters tall before going to a more reasonable seven feet tall at the end as a massively stacked amazonian goth bimbo
Book Smart: Partially bimbofied with a massive semi-permanent erection
Tremor Tear: Clownified, which mostly means bimbofied but with clown makeup. 
Spring Squall: Turned into an amazonian dominatrix
Search-Light: I haven't quite decided how much, but he'll be feminized upon reaching the end of the story. Very short. But I haven't decided between femboy, or shortstack futa.
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One more Cookie Run prompt is in my head thanks to an anon elsewhere.

>Anon lost in Earthbread
>Is found and guided by Kumiho Cookie to a kingdom where she lives
>As they walk, she boasts about the world of cookies, and how he is lucky to have met the cutest cookie of all: her!
>Anon stated that she's cute, but more of a fox/kitsune than cookie, touching her hair and pointing out the ears, making her jolt away away in embarrassment
>Day 2 her ears are hidden this time, total cookie she says again.
>Anon eyes her, she asks if he's swooning for her too
>Anon insists that she's still more fox than cookie, holding her up and petting her tails to her pleasure 
>He also notes that she has thickness to her form, while a cookie is usually flat, grabbing at her curves and form. (Unsure if tit focused or ass focused, can be both)
>Not a bad thing, mind you
>He gropes and plays with her enough to embarrass her away again
>Day 3 she notes that the cookies can fuck, and so can she
>When she makes him cum, surely this will make him believe she is a cookie!
>She gets fucked to exhaustion instead, reverting into her original marshmallow fox post sex.
>...Nope, still not a cookie.
>Regardless, she'll keep trying to persuade the one that saw through her.

Kumiho Cookie information
https://cookierunkingdom.fandom.com/wiki/Kumiho_Cookie
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If there are any hardcore Narutofags that watched all the filler ITT, does anyone here know which is the most agreed-upon location for the Land of Bears/Hoshigakure?I checked the wiki and several world maps and it seems to be one of the hardest filler locations to pin down for some reason.
Yes, I know it's not canon but I like them. I just want to find a place it might be fitted in.

So far, I'm seeing
>northwest of the Land of Earth at the edge of the known map of the world or south of Land of Earth
Team Guy and Naruto arrive there in what seems to be hours and didn't mention the distance once while they acted like they would fall off the earth if they traveled to Land of Birds, usually between the Land of Wind and the Land of Earth in these maps.

>northwest of the Land of Rice Fields/Land of Sound
The grave where Madara lived for decades after being defeated is there and the geography in the anime doesn't coincide with the whole giant animal skeletons that are shown there.

>between the Land of Hot Water and the Land of Lightning
Apparently they made the vacant lot bridging the two a canon country, Land of Frost, for one of the novels.

>filler continent
Some maps actually make an entire peninsula out of filler countries kek
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>>55621163
>Futa
Damnit. It's rare for me to be piqued by someone trying out pony content, but I'm not into that kink unfortunately. I'll pass on reading it, but the premise seems interesting enough to follow for others hopefully.
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Out of curiosity, who do you write these Koikatsu stories for? Just for yourselves and a niche following?
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morning bumo
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>>55625713
Like I said, I'm on the fence if it's that or just a femboy. But if it's not your thing, don't worry it wouldn't show up until the very end. The idea is we have an MC we follow through the story fighting off the zombimbos, but as he's about to reach the girl he has a crush on, he's captured by the matriach bimbo at the next to last second and we have a perspective swap. Maybe at least check out the first one or two chapters, I'd appreciate it.
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I did not write yesterday because I was lazy. But I WILL write today.
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Fuck you 4chan, I just want to post a link to my story, it's not spam
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Gonna post a short story that I've been working on. It's about a college student driving home for one final family dinner before the apocalypse where his mother hooks him up with an exgirlfriend and his mother's friend, who's practically an aunt, comes onto him.

>https://rentry.org/9r68d
>8000 words: M/F, pseudo-incest, surreal, animal behavior, pants-soiling

Maybe sometime tonight I'll make a version without the bodily wastes
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>>55636132
If you're trying to rentry co the link, change the co to rentry.org
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>>55636188
Yes
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>Haven't written in a month

I'm having a little bit of a crisis. I started panicking about not being able to draw and fell into using my time on that instead of writing...
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>>55637382
edit a random stream of consciousness style fic from wattpad :)
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>>55636171
I think calling the male and female host by their exact gender name is very weird to start things out. People know the difference between the host and the hostess, so I think that would fit more than referring to them as male and female at the start.
I'll read this in detail later, but that was the first thing that stuck out to me,

Also
>his mother's friend, who's practically an aunt
still means that the friend is TECHNICALLY not related by blood, so this is in no-way related to psuedo-incest or incest in any way. Caretaker sex? Maybe, but no incest. Hell, not even kissing cousins. Although I didn't get that far in the story to really judge it.
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>>55639244
>I think calling the male and female host by their exact gender name is very weird to start things out. People know the difference between the host and the hostess, so I think that would fit more than referring to them as male and female at the start.
>I'll read this in detail later, but that was the first thing that stuck out to me,

I'll fix that up.

>still means that the friend is TECHNICALLY not related by blood, so this is in no-way related to psuedo-incest or incest in any way.
but if that's the case, then what makes pseudo-incest pseudo?
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>>55639481
I did some research on the term, and I'll partially correct myself.
They would have to be officially family members, but not blood related like
>Step parents
>Mother/father in law
>Literally any anime where brother and sister poke for each other because they're not related by blood, either via adoption or sudden marriage 
So the friend would have to in some way, marry into the family or be adopted into the family to make it pseudo incest.
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>>55639614
I'll just mark him down for fucking a MILF
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>>55619174
>>55619032
>It stands for 'your name' so the person reading just fills in with their name in their imagination
>The idea is that you can use a browser extension to replace y/n with your name
I did a quick search for self inserts in AO3 and browsed some of the stories and lo and behold, apparently that is the norm now. God it feels like I just stepped out of a capsule from old self insert stories I read when I was younger.
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https://rentry.org/dycws

This is that >>55636171 story but with some updated text and without any of the scat/WS
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>>55641897
I've seen (y/n) since 2015-16 at least. Maybe even earlier. How common it is might be fandom dependent, I guess.
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>>55642376
I didn't even read all the tags prior to roughly glancing at the story, so thanks for making this version.
Seems like this story is taking the 'return to monke' meme at its highest, so admittedly it's hard to take seriously.

Anyway, grammar-wise, you got commas where periods are, and periods where commas should be in a mix of normal sentences and in dialogue. I assume that this is still a heavy WIP, so those may get fixed, but wanted to point out to the obligatory link in the OP that really explains how punctuation in dialogue works. It'll be useful in the editing process.
https://theeditorsblog.net/2010/12/08/punctuation-in-dialogue/

>Guy forces another guy to sniff his crotch
...Suddenly the psuedo incest tag we were talking about just morphed into potentially gay sex potential. Though I guess in this sense it's more 'scent domination' or something else m/m related?

I do see some html [i] tags, so I presume those will be added properly when it gets published on a website that supports them.
Overall, the story sets an interesting tone of people accepting the 'end,' and while the sex scenes were relatively quick and not indulgent, it does sell the idea of even the concept of pleasure being returned to monke. I feel rather mixed about it in general. Concept is interesting and the scenario it plays out has potential to be really something. Current execution is bogged down by bits of grammar and unusual tone shifts.

I think this line
>Daniel, did you [i]mate[/i] my best friend?
Could have been delivered a bit better if 'mate' was replaced with something else. It felt like there was real potential for this one to be either really funny or sell the point straight, but the one word kinda holds it back. Fuck? copulate with? I don't know, but mate is kinda weird to use.
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>>55643889
>Seems like this story is taking the 'return to monke' meme at its highest, so admittedly it's hard to take seriously.
I wouldn't call it a serious story. It's meant to be silly even if there are moments of bleakness. It's a black comedy. The world is ending so people will go nuts; Daniel's family start taking on monkey behaviors.

> Though I guess in this sense it's more 'scent domination' or something else m/m related?
It's more general animal behavior and humiliation. The discomfort is that Daniel is forced to sniff the crotch of a man he's known for years.

>Could have been delivered a bit better if 'mate' was replaced with something else. It felt like there was real potential for this one to be either really funny or sell the point straight, but the one word kinda holds it back.
I went with mate because it's more animalistic and sells the characters seeing themselves and others as animals and not people.

Thank you for reading my story and giving criticism.
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>>55634423
Not you, but all I did today was get outlines down for potential stories of the future. I guess it is productive in a sense, but I really should be focusing on the story I should be currently working on.
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>>55614885
I only left out a couple of my most extreme fetishes which are extreme enough I can't host them anywhere, and have been banned off /b/ for posting them.
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>>55647791
Jesus Christ.
Not that anon, by the way, but are they so bad that you can't even name them? I'm curious now Not gonna lie.
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>>55647933
Snuff via asphyxiation and eye socket penetration I haven't been banned for posting before, so I don't mind mentioning them.
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>>55649146
Yeah, I can kinda see why there's no place to host it.
A pity, IMO. Just goes to show that free speech on the internet is dead when something offensive yet inoffensive like that is not allowed anywhere.
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>>55609196
Does this actually happen? Do people find things arousing for a session and then once they cum they find it disgusting thereafter?
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>>55592922 (OP)
based dickbook
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>>55652672
Get off during the writing process, can't get off to the final piece.
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>>55652672
NTA but yeah. It happens to me occasionally. 
>>55649146
Is it untactful to say that I'm happy someone itt has worse fetishes than me? The worst I have written is debatable snuff (not snuff in my opinion) and scat.
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Personality name question:
I can't think of a name for this particular kind of personality trait. Do you guys know if it does have a name from the top of your head, if it even is a personality trait?

The kind I'm thinking of is someone that, in a battle situation, gets their head blown off, and then their headless body takes out paper, pencil, and starts taking notes as to how it led up to the situation.
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>>55656886
I sort of know the kind of feeling you're going for.
The sort of "I got burned when I touched this lever. I will pull it again since I can't conclusively know that it will activate flames each time I do."
Unfortunately, I don't think such a trait can be put into a single word specifically. At least, not to my knowledge.
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>>55656886
Did you take an edible or something?
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>>55657630
Nah, nothing like that. The idea I had in mind involves someone that takes more than a headshot or head-be-gone to really 'kill off,' so to speak.
>>55657543
Yeah something similar, and after doing it twice, he takes notes about it to jot down.
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>>55658423
The phrase "reckless academic" springs to mind, don't know if it fully encapsulates the feeling.
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>>55607605

Here's the first chapter of the Pie Family Horror, my Bimbo-Horror MLP chapter. 

This chapter is just the introduction and leadup, so nothing sexy going on just yet, but I'd appreciate any views and feedback. 
>>55657543
Reminds me of a story with my sister. Our parents took us to a wine-tasting event in the countryside. Why I don't know, my sister was too young to drink, and I don't, so we were bored out of our minds and just started walking the countryside. 

We come across this old farmstead and I'm about to jump this fence with stone fenceposts before my sister says 'you know that's probably electrified'. 

I stop and go 'oh you're totally right, I could have hurt myself there, thanks for that', and I turn around and I walk three paces. And then I hear 'ow' behind me. I turn around and I see my sister by the fence sucking her finger. 

I say to her 'did you touch the fence?' and without a hint of shame, she says 'yeah.' and I go 'you were the one who told me it was probably electrified!' and she says 'yeah, but I wanted to make sure'. 

Which is my little sister in a nutshell. Smart enough to know something is a bad idea. Not smart enough to not do it anyway.
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>>55662409
Also a pic.
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Is it too fetish-y to have a completely normal and masculine male character be reincarnated into a woman in a sequel?
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>>55662894
If you detail the transformation, it is definitely a fetish.
I'd still tag it somewhere in the story name or summary as a thing that will happen at the very start regardless.

>in a sequel
Is this a temporary transformation or a permanent one?
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>>55654737
>Is it untactful to say that I'm happy someone itt has worse fetishes than me?
No, I am aware that I am unusual. The fact I can find drawn pornography for some of my fetishes though tells me I'm not unique, just very uncommon, which is for the best, really. 

>>55652672
More common than you might think. Everybody has a different moral threshold for disgust, though, so people who feel this way don't necessarily have super extreme fetishes, they might simply hold themselves to a stricter standard.
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>>55649495
>offensive yet inoffensive
nah, you know what, i'm kinkshaming, if you get off to people actually dying you're fucked in the head
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>>55662423
There isn't really a transformation. He dies and years later a female character that has pretty much the same personality as him appears and would be heavily implied that she's his reincarnation, since the setting has reincarnation as a somewhat important part of it.
It's not spelled it out openly but she would be pretty much the same character with the same flaws and strengths as him.
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>>55647791
My most extreme was a bad end optional end.
>>55649146
No. Mine was only a pop.
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>>55668661
I can't believe how hard my cock gets over fictional characters in imaginary situations ACKCHUALLY getting raped/dying.
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>>55669043
Skyla rape was and is a classic.
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>>55662409
The link just takes me to the OP of the bimbo thread.
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>>55669088
Forever in our hearts.
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>>55669043
Rape is hot, but death is not. Don't waste good characters like that.
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>>55669120
Anon, most of those stories are just one shots/one offs and nobody is actually dying for good. Not even the character.
You could even come up with a reason for the character to be alive next chapter and kill her again and again and again until you exhaust any scenarios you like.
You can't waste something that is not subject to any type of scarcity.
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>>55669120
Ok, Christine.
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Bump
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>>55669096
Woopsie, didn't realize I did that, here's the link proper. 

https://www.deviantart.com/samaster/art/Pie-Family-Horror-Show-Ch-1-957360080
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>>55669006
I don't think you meant to reply to me, but yeah that doesn't sound at all like a fetish. Just how the rules of the setting work.
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>>55671451
Oh, yeah, I'm an idiot.

What I meant, though, was that I could've easily just made that character a man again but I chose not to. Somehow, it felt right to me in his case but with everything being read as a fetish nowadays you kind of start hearing that little voice calling you a coomer whenever you make a choice like this.
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survival bump
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How much action do you guys like in your stories, reading or writing? I have to say that it's unironically ten times more fun for me to write it than sexy stuff.
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>>55674631
As a reader, it depends entirely on how the story is written. Some of the most boring scenes I've read have been "action" scenes. But then again, some authors write boring (and bad!) sex scenes.
Maybe I could say that I like plot? Sex scenes and action scenes can advance the story and tell us more about characters, or they can be just filler content.
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>>55674631
I've had a good deal of fun writing a few action scenes, but usually write smut where one could go because why have people fight in a smut story when you can have them fuck instead?
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>>55672439
Something's really only a fetish if you are jacking off to it. People have diaper fetishes. But that doesn't mean if you have a scene where someones changing a babys diaper that it's a fetish. If you put undue attention on that scene in such a way that it becomes clear you're jacking off to it as you write, then it's definitely a fetish. 

Also- gender identity is kinda bullshit. A lot of us like to pretend it has incredibly clear cut definitions, but we make all that shit up and it changes according to time and place. Most cultures that believe in reincarnation logically believe that at some point a soul is going to wind up in the body of the opposite gender, there were even the Cathars a christian heresy that believed this in the middle ages. If you actually believe in reincarnation it's not really a revelation, only if you have a worldview where ones gender identity is baked into ones very soul.
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>>55612451
Why are you editing it then...unless people here edit for others regularly and i just didnt notice.
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>>55676404
He was reading it and the story was good but the writing was shite, and in order to enjoy it he edited it as he read it.
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Requesting anthropomorphized Dig Dug, Pooka and Fygar
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>>55676952
This is a writethread, not a drawthread. You gotta make it a bit more detailed as to what you want written. Still zero promises as to it getting delivered regardless.
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To the Lillymon requester, I think I'm ready to give it a shot now. Though, I'm looking over the tag list and noticed "loss of virginity". Just to make sure, do you mean Lillymon's virginity, the guy's, or maybe both?
Also, have you thought up of anything in the meantime that you wanted to add to the request?
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>>55676404
>>55676705
No. Actually the story was bad, terrible even, but I liked the premise and one of the embedded images enough to start editing it with the goal of jacking off to it when it was ready.
The thing is that so many things are just brushed aside and retconned without care in the original that in my attempt of fleshing them out and keeping things in order, particularly keeping the characters in character, it has mutated into something else entirely.
There was a part that was a date in an amusement park with the first girl to confess to the self insert and another girl that threatened to make their relationship public, perfect for an entire chapter of the two fighting over the self insert, that was literally one sentence in the original.
That's why I felt my sanity slipping for doing this shit, but I haven't written this much for this long in a while so I'm thankful.
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>>55678855
Oh by it's my time to shine!
>Loss of virginity
Yes.
Jokes aside, I think that was a leftover in the heat of the moment. There is loss of virginity, but it's not exactly the focus. Still, neither had sex until now so...yeah.

I did think of a few things to add.
He doesn't particularly care about Digimon being a secret, but he worries about her hitting things with all the flying she does.

As part of her fondness for him, she makes an excuse to have him carry her Bridal style, even though she can fly. She's surprisingly light. Smells good too. She noticed his nose picking up her scent and teases him about it, even going as far as to push his head against her chest to get a nice whiff.

Something in the big greenhouse spooks Lillymon (maybe a large, well grown pitcher plant or venus fly trap?) mid-flight to divebomb hug his head. Puts him to very close proximity to her groin, only divided by a piece of her skirt. He can feel her pussy radiating warmth, goddammit. She swerves around his head to eventually make it a piggy back ride, not bothered one bit.

A scene where during said piggyback ride, she easily lifts hims, using her legs/thighs to hold him during flight.

Finally, during the sex scene, I think it would be hot for a round 2 of sex where he fucks her in front of a large mirror in his room, so that the both of them can see each other having sex from a series of angles (particularly for me, full nelson).

Is it possible for these scenes to be added along with the main one?
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>>55679577
All of that sounds perfectly fine. I've got no real ETA on this, but I'll be chipping away at it from day to day. I guess I'll drop an update when I've got 5,000 words done.
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>>55680126
That's perfectly fine by me. Take your time and feel free to ask any further questions you have. Thank you for retaining your interest in more Digimon goodness!
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>>55679330
Inspiration does come from weird places eh?
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Requesting a story about a closeted gay cheetah boy who has a longtime secret crush on his straight human best friend (male). Unbeknownst to him, his friend is actually aware of it, and during a fortuitous night, he decides to give in and sleep with his cheetah friend. What seemed like a one time thing at first then develops into an actual relationship. 

Tags:
Kissing, cuddling, romance, petting, purring, self-grooming, oral, anal

more details here: https://rentry.org/ac6t8
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Requesting a romance between a female trainer and her Toxtricity. The plot should revolve not so much around the fact that her pokemon wants to fuck her (she is fine with that), but more that he doesn't want their relationship to be a secret. Let me know if you are interested, I like discussing my requests.
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>taking notes on part one era naruto fillers for my fanfic
>juicing up my favorite characters, meaning most of them, and planning pairs, future shippuden era plots that don't intefere with the canon story, and other shit
>though i still haven't come up with a way to prevent kagerou, flying lolibaba from the land of rice fields arc, from one shotting my MC
>mfw i remember that i'll have to kill most of them because what I wanted to say with this entire story was that naruto's willingness to empathize with others and push through the problems in front of him, things my MC doesn't have, are the only reason those filler arcs turned out as well as they did
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>>55686736
>though i still haven't come up with a way to prevent kagerou, flying lolibaba from the land of rice fields arc, from one shotting my MC
Let her one shot the MC, but have him get better later on or revived after the fight in some contrived way. Maybe the one shot didn't kill him properly or something, or she was one of those characters that ignore a body when the heart stops.
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>>55688020
>Let her one shot the MC, but have him get better later on or revived after the fight in some contrived way. 
The issue is that the jutsu she used to attack Jiraiya and Naruto vaporized their surroundings and was only tanked because the former summoned his asspul frog stomach, which was treated as the strongest defense during that era, at the last second. There's no way of tanking that at my MC's level, rusty and out of shape mid to high jounin level, and the best summon he would have couldn't tank that either.

I'm thinking of having him use a seal on her to disable her chakra network but I think that it would be perfectly reasonable to expect her just shed her own body, like she did in the anime after she was beaten by Naruto for a second time, and then proceed to vaporize my MC after forcing the seal open with her antlion transformation.
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>>55688847
Any chance he can be launched high in the air or deep underground instead, or even swap places jutsu of some kind? 
 I'm not familiar with Naruto, but it seems like it's a series where there are ways to essentially cheat death or fake it, even for a short while.
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>>55689951
Now that you mention it, I gave him a technique from a filler arc that's basically a super dense fire made up of radiation that can be molded into anything.
Using it in that moment, something he didn't want to do because he used to be one of the medics that found out about the radiation and pushed against its use, would be a good way to reveal that he is a rogue ninja from Hoshigakure but I'm not sure if I can sell the idea of him using that as a shield.

Thanks for the back and forth, anon.
Though now I still have to contend with the idea of doing a darling genocide on this thing before starting.
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bump
--- 55693483
Someone left a nice comment on one of my stories today. They picked up on a lot of the little details I put into it, and called it a gem. It's in a niche fetish so there isn't much competition, but it still made me happy my work was enjoyed by someone who has that fetish to such an extent.
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>>55693483
Good job, anon.
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I wrote a fapfic where Prison Jonesy secures a Victory Royale by raping Orochimaru after threatening him with Darth Vader's lightsaber. 
https://www.hentai-foundry.com/stories/user/Marukka-Sama/64321/Jonesy-Booty-Warrior/167573/Chapter-1/Jonesy-Breaks-in-Snake-Bonzo
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It feels like a one or two syllable character name is optimal for ease of inserting into a sentence when needed.
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requesting shy lizard boy going to all human school loses his virginity to the (small titty) goth girl. 
(titty size is not that important, I just happen to prefer them small)

tags: anatomically correct, cloaca, hemipenis
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>>55677309
I'm sure we know humans in tight red or green suits would feel if an overworked digger came and exploded your neighbours.
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>>55695620
>Multiple people talking in the same paragraph
I guess the coloring of dialogue text helps, but it's still a slog to understand who's saying what like that. Always hit the enter key when someone else starts talking.
That aside, it is a shame that even under threat, The booty warrior chose to give him the easy way rather than the hard way.

>Fortnite/Naruto, m/m, rape/dub-con
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>>55693483
And that's how you know that your niche story fits perfectly in the world, because someone found it and appreciated it.
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>>55698993
Fixed it a wee bit. Also, the colored dialogue text was something I stole from Telltale's The Walking Dead.
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>>55694550
>>55700199
Thanks, anons.
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>>55695620
Not a big fan of using colored dialogue, not bad otherwise.
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>>55704263
again, just me being a telltale fan
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>>55695620
https://youtu.be/MLjclbgnAPM [Embed]
It got a chuckle. Haven't heard of this man in a good while. May he still be infamous around the world and web.
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>>55707070
/sjg/ is a few blocks down bro
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>>55706136
I was binging Oz lately and that's what inspired me to write the prison rape aspect of the fic.
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I have written nothing in a such a long while. Is it a valid strategy to do a collection of sentences for a story and worry about everything else later?
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>>55710318
There are many ways to force yourself to try and write. You can just keep writing sentences endlessly until a cohesive thought pops in your head. You can try and make an outline to go off of. You can just focus on writing short snippets of as many ideas as possible and then pick one to focus on. As long as you try and get something down it might help.
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>>55639481
It's not incest but it's still taboo in most cultures. Fucking your mom's friend who's practically your aunt is pushing a boundary and should be commended
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>>55713566
But what if your mom pairs you with said friend in the first place as an attempt to marry you off?
Must reach.

That aside, never thought of it as taboo like that. People tend to make a fuss about the blood related/adopted ones moreso. And I guess the prior example I just posted could only partially work if you didn't exactly grow up with said friend of mom from a young age. Cultures are weird.
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Watchlist ticket question.
What would be a good age to give a female character so she can provide the full daughterwife experience in a story without making her partner look like a complete pedo?
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>>55714554
Anywhere in the teens. Usually 13-14 is the minimum. You'll be subject more to statutory rape as a possibility at that threshold, depending on where you live, but don't be fooled. Someone out there will still just say pedo regardless. The age range also gives whoever is the person of interest some years to know the person before they're officially 18, but, y'know... grooming talk and all that gets priority talk if that happens.
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>>55714554
if you're planning on sharing it, 18
if you're not planning on sharing it, who cares
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>>55714554
...how old is Sailor Moon and her fated lover the Tuxedo Mask again?
Actually, now that I think of it, I don't think anyone batted an eye on those two, and I recall there was a bit of an age gap in that regard.
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>>55714958
14 and 16 i think
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>>55714716
>13-14
I see. Maybe I was imagining her a little too young but I have no problem with aging her up to that range; my actual problem was that I'm not too sure if the archetype I was basing her on, that of a naive girl that's devoted to her father and will do anything he orders her regardless of how dumb and reckless it might be, will work at that age.
Even then, my plan was always to run their relationship through stages; first dismissal/annoyance (a sense of duty on her part), then appreciation, then to genuine friendship to love, and then to being a couple.
Naturally, I'd have the guy wait until she's of age; even though I could reasonably argue that the setting has different ages of consent but my MC is not into kids.

>>55714859
>daughterwife
>at 18
Anon.........

>>55714958
>>55714958
I never checked before but it's 3 years. Usagi starts at 14 and Tuxedo at 17; though the spanish wiki has them at 14 and 19 respectively.
It's not that much but Usagi was such a retard at the beginning that it seemed bigger than it was.
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requesting a living fursuit story
>girl works at an amusement park or police has the mascot 
>gets to wander around all over in suit
>it's a male canine character
>she's way too into playing the role and staying in character
>they use some experimental tech or such to try to improve or upgrade the suit making it sort of bio-mechanical/organic
>goes wrong and gets corrupted or works too well
>the changes are lewd based
>a bit more form fitting and enhanced hips and ass more shaped
>since the character/suit is supposed to be male it gains a large canine sheath/dick and balls
>the suit forces urges on her and gets her to fuck people and/or dogs with the suit's dick and she gets pleasure through the suit
>enhances her sense of smell so she can smell fertile women
>she also stays in character while fucking them
>the suit cums too
>impregnation possible?
>alt. route or suit changing more where it adapts to being worn by the girl
>takes on large tits and canine vagina to fit with a female wearing it
>think lewd/sexy cartoon look
also basic idea of the girl being smaller and less intimidating outside the suit so something like these heights for an idea of what I mean
girl: 5'3"
girl in suit: 6'7"
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>>55713857
>But what if your mom pairs you with said friend in the first place as an attempt to marry you off?
Hot
--- 55719216
What's the best place to post fanfiction if I want to be a bit edgy?
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>>55719216
There's a list in the OP of places to post, I'd suss them out until you find one of them that seems like a good place.
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>>55719724
Shit, sorry.
I got into the habit of ignoring the OP from /co/ lol
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>>55719740
No problem
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bump
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>>55723519
I could be writing about killing chaos right now
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>>55714958
Sailor Moon was 13-15 at the start of the series. Tuxedo Mask was 17-19
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>>55698993
>being forced to strip under threat of being count dooku'd
>"the easy way"
I'd call it the medium way.
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>>55680433
Guess I lied, here's 3,000 words to check out. Gave the guy a name this time, if that's not a problem. It was an amusing gimmick the last few times but grew a little repetitive, I felt. I'll change it to another title, if you prefer.

Untitled Lillymon story
https://rentry.org/rap4g
No tags as of yet, other than the obligatory "Digimon, M/F, and WIP"

Let me know how it's going and any details you might want changed. Hopefully it's enjoyable for now. Feels kinda weird returning to something more simplistic but also still has a story to tell, so I'm hoping that it has a good balance of quicker pace and detail.
Thanks for reading.
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>>55730292
>Gave the guy a name.
A part of me really, really wants to forego his name to keep it consistent with the other digimon content you have done so far. At the same time, Admiring Boy is a mouthful compared to Prince and Pet. I'll give the name some thought and if there's another update, I'll decide to keep or ditch Mason.

You set up his job and one of his workplaces decently, and it marks an interesting difference compared to the usual city-based setting from before.
Personality-wise, you hit it pretty well done. The man is noticeably more stumped compared to the others, and you captured Lillymon 's Cyber Sleuth personality very nicely. It is a good capture of a younger time of us holding those small crushes for characters that don't exist.

Also internet banter is fitting. I'm not sure if it is intentional, but I like the small reference to the Angewomon story you threw in as one of the comments. Either way, thanks for the update and I'll keep an eye for more! You're on point!
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>>55693483
sublime
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>>55730292
One detail I overlooked
>Deep purple eyes
I think the card print I post for a reference is a bit off. Her eyes are usually portrayed as black or black with a hint of a deep/dark green. Sorry about that.
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>>55649146
>snuff 
>eye penetration 
anon wtf. seek help
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>>55731582
>I'll give the name some thought and if there's another update, I'll decide to keep or ditch Mason.
Sure thing. I'll probably drop another update at 6,000 words, which, at my current rate, should be in three days.

>You set up his job and one of his workplaces decently(...)
Glad you're enjoying it. My usual paranoia of everything I make being horribly boring was rearing its head as I wrote it. Don't be afraid to levy any criticisms if you have 'em, however. I want you to enjoy it as much as possible.

>Also internet banter is fitting. I'm not sure if it is intentional, but I like the small reference to the Angewomon story you threw in as one of the comments.
Yes indeed. I barely even remember writing the story, but I figure it'd be amusing to bring it in the circle of this "universe" as it were.

>Either way, thanks for the update and I'll keep an eye for more! You're on point!
Thanks for reading, again.

>>55737427
Hm, I actually quite liked the deep purple. I'll make the fix soon.
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I wrote this for /adhg/, but I figure some people here might like it too. It's been a long time since I wrote anything furry. This uses the "handkerchief code" idea I mentioned a while back, and has almost no dialogue. I hope I managed to make it interesting even without it.

Rabbit to the Wolves
https://archiveofourown.org/works/46450948
>male human/female wolfgirls, femdom, furry, scent kink, scent marking, sweat, bodily fluids, cunnilingus, vaginal sex, human-like genitalia, 7.3K words

Any feedback appreciated.
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>>55737561
if I had money for therapy I'd just commission art so I don't have to write it myself
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>>55698993
>>55704263
>>55706136
I'm thinking about writing more Fortnite smut that exists solely to exacerbate how retarded the game has become. Any ideas, guys?
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>>55738524
I don't know anything about fortnite, I usually just read w/e has a non-con tag on it. Last I remember it used to be a game about fighting zombies, now its a season pass money machine that produces characters made for SFM porn.
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Requesting Bea and her female Machamp having some fun with Anon after him winning her Gym medal.
>suggested kinks: lewd training, femdom, mff threesome, body/muscle worship
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>>55739367
It's basically Donald Mustard's M.U.G.E.N. build and The Ultimate Showdown of Ultimate Destiny at this point.
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>>55715742
>that of a naive girl that's devoted to her father and will do anything he orders her regardless of how dumb and reckless it might be, will work at that age
It honestly works even more at that range. This is usually where puberty begins, and being loyal to the parent usually peaked right at that point. Afterwards it goes on a decline because of body changes, but experiencing the world can have changes affect her too.
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>>55743301
Odd. I thought puberty began at nine, ten. It started for me at that age at least. And girls by, uuuuhhhh, seventh grade I think, were already doing stupid shit like smoking and mouthing off their parents.

But I think I'll take it just to be sure, I'm not feeling based enough to go Usagi Drop on my readers.
I'll make sure to thank the anons of /trash/ if this goes anywhere.
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>>55743557
>>I thought puberty began at nine, ten
>On average, girls begin puberty at ages 10–11 and complete puberty at ages 15–17; boys generally begin puberty at ages 11–12 and complete puberty at ages 16–17. The major landmark of puberty for females is menarche, the onset of menstruation, which occurs on average between ages 12 and 13. For males, first ejaculation, spermarche, occurs on average at age 13.
Onset of puberty has shifted quite radically in the last 100-150 years. It used to start about +2 years later.
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Anyone know where to look for cover artists? I'd like to ditch my AI generated one at some point.
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>>55745159
I went looking for one a long time ago and couldn't find reasonably priced options. Ended up buying credits on a stock art repository that gave edit and commercial rights and used it to make my own, which is fine for now. Would like to know if you find a good answer.
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>>55714958
>It's not that much but Usagi was such a retard at the beginning that it seemed bigger than it was.
Intelligence really does affect the feel/age of a character
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these dudes really think it's still 1990 and they're in japan
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>>55746818
90s localization says it's on California, totally not Japan.
Eat those hamburgers.
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>>55747358
Changing the setting to California doesn't change that it was written by Japanese guys in the 90s, who had the moral responsibility of Japanese guys 8n the 90s. Its still a questionable reference to measure against when you're a westerner in the 2020s. Also, a 17 or 19 year old male can't have a 14 year old daughter, which makes it an even more questionable reference.
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>>55685263
>more that he doesn't want their relationship to be a secret
How would this be portrayed in your opinion?
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>plan an outline for a fic
>realize the plot can continue past the planned bad end, the antagonist has an use for MC still, a year or two later
>slowly the two spiral into sick abuser dynamic MC fails to ever realize
>he has several chances to run away but declines since he believes he's living a sexual dream
>story ends into quiet TEOTWAWKI, leg amputation, and few more mental punches in the end
This approaches edgy grimdark and I'm not even into amputees, just need a way to dehumanize MC and make him permanently helpless. Goddamn.
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>>55676952
Good old fashioned video game horror? In *my* write fag general?
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I'm thinking about writing another Fortfic about involving Vivica Saint, specifically one involving femdom and slight elements of guro (i.e. snowballing neck blood).
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>>55753626
Well, he would insist on trying to do things like holding hands or kissing in public, and other public displays of affection. Of course for this to work within the story, it needs to be understood that the pokemon here has a high enough intelligence to even understand human relationships and the implications of his behavior. So his overall behavior should reflect such intelligence, and even stress out how "human" he acts. It also requires his trainer to understand what his behavior means, and the fact that he is frustrated when she turns down his affection in public but not in private. So when he gives her the cold shoulder when they get home she should understand that he feels offended that she turned him down in public.
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>>55738062
This story doesn't align with any of my fetishes, but I enjoy your writing style. It's easygoing and fun to read. 

Is wifwolf pronounced like "wife"wolf or "whiff"wolf, and is the idea an established thing in furry circles, or one you made for the story?
>The real question was if she still knew the meaning of the ancient signal. It had once been common knowledge,
Was this something he would have learned from the wizard's apparaisal, or in his time as a treasure hunter? Either is plausible and it's not hard to suspend disbelief, but with the misconceptions mentioned earlier around wifwolves in human society, it makes me wonder how he would know. I could also be reading too deep into narration.
>As they humped his body everywhere but the places Ardem most wanted them to
This got a chuckle out of me. I like the way you build up to the encounter and it turns into a bit more than Ardem bargained for.
>loosing himself
I'm pretty sure loosing works here, but it seems like a situation where "losing" would be more commonly used. I suppose "loosing" gives him more agency in the exchange, but I wanted to point it out in case it is a typo.

I liked the details about wifwolf pack culture, as well as the little things that hinted at a larger world, like how farmers blamed them for missing livestock. I also think the lack of dialogue suits this story well. All killer, no filler.
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>writing climax of story
>think of good idea to write
>finish writing for the day but didn't get to the idea
>completely forget what it was by the time I sit down to write the next day
i-it must have been a bad idea if I still can't think of it after two days, haha
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>>55758284
Which do you think is worse, that, or writing 500-700 words one day and realizing that it didn't go the way you wanted to, and now you need to re-write it all?
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>>55758284
this has burned me often enough that I now obsessively write down everything that goes through my head (and then I forget them in a massive unorganized pile of notes that I never read)
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>>55758124
>easygoing and fun to read
This is my top priority, so I'm happy you think that.
>is the idea an established thing
It's just "werewolf" but with Old English "woman" ("wif", which became the Modern English "wife") instead of "man" ("wer"). I believe the correct pronunciation is with a long i, so more like "weefwolf", although I don't actually know any Old English. There are "wifwolf" threads here in /trash/ sometimes.
>Was this something he would have learned from the wizard's apparaisal
He looked it up in the library after the wizard told him which book he needed. I skipped over that scene because it didn't advance the story enough to be worth the word count.
>loosing himself
Fixed the typo, thanks.

Thanks for your feedback!
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>>55758410
Writing 2500-3000 words one day and coming back and realizing its all shit
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>>55758410
Forgetting for sure. I can always rewrite (this is already a complete rewrite of the first draft), but if the idea isn't there then it isn't there.
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Requesting a piss-kink fic about a group of young adult women who travel to the Minecraft world via a secret magic portal. One has been there before and the rest are noobs. It could be a sorority initiation or something like that. The fic isn't about breaking the economy, so they can't bring things back from the Minecraft world, and if they take anything with them it will despawn after five minutes unless they're carrying it, just like in the game. Despawned real-world items reappear on the real world side of the portal. Likewise, if they die in Minecraft, they reappear in the real world, and any injuries or status effects they acquired there are restored (they still age though). I think it's best if they have only human abilities and can't mine or craft, but feel free to include those game mechanics if you disagree.

The main gimmick is that urine obeys Minecraft fluid mechanics. Peeing on a block generates a urine source block there for the duration, which spreads just like Minecraft water. Any block it touches is converted to a urine-soaked version, and can be converted back to normal by contact with water (with may be tricky in dry biomes or under cover). This concept could be introduced when a first-time visitor ignores the experienced girl's warning to pee over the edge of a cliff, and uses flat ground instead and accidentally soaks herself. The idea can be explored in amusing ways. Minecraft water could be of dubious safety to drink, so the girls are encouraged to hydrate well before arriving.

The Minecraft mobs are not sapient, and don't attack them by default. But to add some conflict, Endermen could still be triggered by eye contact, and urine could harm them like water.

Optionally there could be a sex scene (consenting adults), either with a sapient male Player, or with a male human who somehow ended up in the Minecraft world with them (and has a piss kink). If so, one of the girls should "squirt" on orgasm. I'd prefer if they had natural pubic hair.
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Any good tips for writing smut? im writing a cotl fapfic for myself
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>>55766711
cotl?
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>>55767245
cult of the lamb
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Request: Zelda needs Link's help with performing a ritual, she's certainly not doing this to seduce him and get some hero cock in her, she definitely didn't dress like this to get him hard, and she most certainly isn't looking at him with those "fuck me" eyes to get his seed and produce a kid.
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>>55766711
See the links in the OP >>55592922 (OP)
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Does anyone happen to know if lithium batteries (in cars) burn hot enough to destroy human remains completely? Even bones? I'm getting rid of some corpses in a story.
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>>55770330
I am no expert, but I would very much doubt it
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>>55770330
Probably not bones or whatever's left. Even in fireball explosives that had even more explosive aftermaths, teeth and some material tend to remain and be identifiable.
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>>55773837
>>55770330
Thanks. I'll have to change plans or kill those gyus in a way that leaves no marks to bones then.
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bump for fucking your aunt
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I'm writing a visual novel, should I use Japanese names to get the weeaboo audience if the setting is basically just "generic small town" and isn't the main focus?
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>>55778649
Up to you. Weebs are the ones who get into VNs the most for obvious reasons, but I don't think its the names thay draw them to it. Pick names most fitting for the setting IMO. If you're using generic RPGmaker backgrounds of "Japan Town, ext. scene night B" or something like that then I'd say weeby sounding names would work fine.
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>>55778649
How were are you going?
If full, it also means you'll have to be consistent with using honorifics on the name too.
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>>55778649
I wouldn't, it's extremely cringe when somebody unfamiliar with Japanese culture tries to imitate it. Write what you know.
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Requesting a fic about Either Bebop and Rocksteady (1987) or Pound from space Jam

Them capturing a human (the reader), mooning him to taunt him but then power bottom for him when he gets turned on by it. Rimming and groping their butts included if possible?
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Sorry for the early 2010s Gaia question.
Where can I ask anon-like minded people that know about Naruto to balance my Naruto OC?
I've came up with a moveset I'm pretty happy with and feel reflects his backstory and personality but I also feel like he's coming off a little too strong for a ninja from a shit village known for one busted ability.
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Bunp
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>>55789742
Try >>55756581 or any Naruto thread you can find. For that specific question, your best bet is to find threads that discuss it.
There may also be a Naruto thread on /a/ and /vg/
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>>55592922 (OP)
AOSIAF AU - Wedding Ritual between Danny X OC

Main idea is how would a Valyrain wedding between highborn families would go(especially when they don't need to rely on incest to continue the pureblood legacy nor making such rites quick either)

>https://docs.google.com/document/d/1AoofQ7YvCsis5qPvZ6cm5_riYOoht2JpKhPO6N-xo2U/edit?usp=sharing
>Exhibitionism, Mastrubation, Action, Vaginal, Cumshot, Stripping Armor, Watersports, Dancing, multiple orgasms, marriage, Canon X OC, Canon deviation
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>>55794052
Almost forgot, am posting this mostly as to see if the pacing on the story is good sofar, especially on the stripping-dancing process
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>>55794052
> AOSIAF
What does this translate to?
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How do you write drug usage if you're too autistic for drug connections irl?
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>>55794652
a typo of A Song Of Ice and Fire?
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>>55795243
Watch any modern adult swim show. You're guaranteed to go on a trip.
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>>55795277
>>55794652

Ah, mind the typo.
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>>55758284
Always write down your ideas, you will thank yourself later
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>>55592922 (OP)
Just wrote this about an adventurer who ends up getting raped by goblins after getting fat in retirement. Would very much appreciate any feedback, especially technical feedback on the sex since my experience is limited writing actual hardcore scenes.
>rentry.org/7k2g2
>vaginal, anal, oral, gang-rape, goblins, bbw
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>>55797193
how do i take notes while dreaming
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>>55793169
>/a/ and /vg/
idunno, man, those are shitpost central.
I'll try the /sjg/, though. Thanks.
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>>55801624
You're welcome
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>>55731582
Here's another 3,000 for the Lillymon story. Let me know how it went, like usual, and feel free to ask for any changes.
https://rentry.org/rap4g
No real update to the tags.
If this is good, the next update should be the final one.
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>>55795243
What's your POV? You could use pretty basic descriptors of a character being out of it (glassy eyes, slurring speech, passed out) or acting erratic (scratching, twitching, hallucinations)
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>>55804700
Yay, more updates!
Also, after giving it some thought, I think it would be best to forego the Mason name, but you are free to bookmark it down the road. I kind of, sort of, have an idea on when to reveal the true name of these nameless guys, but that wouldn't be here nor there, and that would assume you would still be willing to write more digimon things. But I say cut the name off if it isn't too troublesome.

>Water splash scene
I would personally give Lillymon a bit more of a reaction to the sudden spray of water on her body, either because of the coldness or to clarify that she doesn't want their share of water either! Besides it's pretty salty for her taste.

>Flytrap scene
I think having her yelp would be cuter. You could also make it a bit more erotic if she spun around later
>yelp and pounce head
>why would you keep that
>muffled voice as he struggles to speak 'keep what'
>she finally spun around to ride his shoulders, giving him breathing room
>that!
>A decently sized cluster of venus fly traps
>Little shop of horrors joke

A minor note: As Lillymon is written and portrayed a bit like a Pixie, a few spruced lines for some back and forths are good. I singled out these two to note. 
Like.
>Her finger pointed at him. “Not really means sorta yes!”
>She puffed her cheeks. “I’m not that short.” Damn that was cute.

But otherwise things are looking very nicely done! Keep up the wonderful pace.
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>>55811289
All of that sounds perfect. I should've really used the pixie angle from the getgo, my bad. I'll make those fixes and get to finishing this up.
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Don't think I've shared this one yet

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1gLHfYwG9jmW_P_IsVEapQrRjRSwUj8N7/view?usp=drivesdk
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I feel like practicing my writing since I havn't done any writing at all since I was in highschool which was about 14 years ago.
though I can't decide which of my favoured fetishes I should focus on the most, or what combo as I have a few conflicting concepts of what type of stuff I could try out first.

so far which subject should I make the main thing of my first few things as I dust off my rusty writing skills
>incest
>transformation(of various types, but especially bodypart transformation/absorption)
>vore(of all types, but especially unbirth)
>anything sci-fi related
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>>55815650
Vagina tf. But not of the usual face to vagina variety, experience wise and anatomy wise it should be like they have a vagina and nothing else.
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>>55815294
Tags?
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>>55815891
Tftg, sex change, mtf, inanimate, flashlight, clinic, magic, fairy, doctor
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>>55815967
*fleshlight. Damn autocorrect
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>>55815650
incest (sibling)
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>>55795243
I tried a couple things, and work with quite a few junkies. If you need descriptions on what's going in the head of someone on psychedelics, i can give you some insight, otherwise i can ask the others what they experience on coke and molly, if you're keen.
I know very little only about opiates.
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>>55798431
The ambiguity of how fat she actually is works both in favor and against the story. What you have now gives limited specifics, but allows the reader to come up to their conclusions as to what kind of fat the character of focus is. Is she just a plump adventurer or is she an unironic blob? Whatever size she is, its still mobile enough to still go on an adventure.
The description of her gained weight does shoe detail as she gets more winded trying to slice away the goblins too, yet it still leaves it up in the air as to how much she actually has gained since 3 years. The tearing apart of her clothes and accessories was a nice teaser to warm up.

Foreplay-wise, I know that these are goblins we're talking about who tend to rush for the goods immediately, but one of the kinks I like in BBW works is the detail that goes into grabbing and squeeze the enhanced assets of the girl of focus; so I was rather disappointed that this was pretty much overlooked with only a small line and a half dedicated to that regard before the actual sex began.

Sex-wise, the insertion was rather quick. Again, goblins, but I find it strange that the anal sex had a more detailed feeling of invasion and stretching than vaginal. I will say at this point I found the more detailed foreplay I was looking for was going on: using the excess folds to their advantage. Although it does come at the cost of the hardcore sex part going on a bit of the side. Balance is hard in that regard, but after the quick stumble of fast insertion, the rest plays out much better. Although even the climax in the pussy does feel rushed too, feeling more like an off-mention compared to the rest of the cum moments.

That was my first impression in reading the story as a whole.
>good start, interesting choice to leave how fat she is ambiguous
>really shows off when she's flailing about
>cloth tearing hot
>initial grabbing/foreplay and vaginal penetration/climax is weak
>the ravaging during the sex is hot
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>write a sentence
>it has four commas in it

this is fine
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>>55821768
Unironically yes.
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>>55821768
Honestly, as long as it's not a run-on sentence, the sentence feels better unbroken, or you're listing things, it's acceptable.
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>>55820512
Thanks mate, really appreciate the feedback. Wasn't expecting to get such detailed feedback since the story tags are fairly niche. Not a ton of people who are into fat girls, hard noncon AND goblins.
I'm trying to improve my writing of sex scenes, but it's tough being objective with your own work. Looking back it seems obvious that key moments like the vaginal penetration - an obvious watershed moment - or some of the climaxes don't have enough to them. I'll see if I can go back and flesh out (heh) some of the scantier parts at some point. Thanks again for taking the time to read.
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>>55815650
scifi incest with the threat of alien vore
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>>55821877
>Unironically, yes.
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>>55756177
I've had 3 days of writer's block. Help me with some Fortnite-related ideas for a fic, preferably involving Vivica Saint (a vampire).
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>>55827415
>Look her up
>is a skin with no details at all as for background/history
>no knowledge of Fortnite
This is honestly pretty damn difficult, especially since I don't have much of an attachment to that series.
https://fortnite.fandom.com/wiki/Vivica_Saint

There is a suggestion that she is a sister to a different character, so you could get away with making something based off of that. Maybe
>Match taking place
>both of them are pinned down and questioned if they are actually related or not
>they deny it, except they try to keep their sibling relationship a secret
>the people that pinned them use the excuse to force them into a lesbian style makeout, because vampires going lesbo on normal folk is hot
>sisters are forced into making out with each other for an indescriminate amount of time, starting reluctant, but slowly get into it and start scissoring each other
>as they climax, their captors get no-scoped by some other players
>they swear never to talk about it again, despite how good it felt
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>>55827415
I don't know anything about fortnite, but this girl is hot. Do something about her.
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>>55827645
I know that female vampires have a lesbian connotation (i.e. "Carmilla"), but vampires and dominance go hand in hand, so maybe I'll have Vivica hypnotizing Leon Kennedy into knocking her up. 
tags: femdom, creampie, impregnation, dubious consent, slight guro, etc.
>>55827649
Definitely have something for Haze involving lezdom. Keep in mind that these stories only exist to point out how utterly retarded Fortnite has become.
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https://www.deviantart.com/samaster/art/Pie-Family-Horror-Story-Ch-2-958403967

Ch. 2 of my erotic-horor MLP fanfiction. This one with an actual sex scene. 

How do you write sex scenes? Using 3d images from Koikatsu I think worked for moving along things, but I didn't know how to describe anything beyond just describing what physically went on, 'insert object a into hole b' sort of stuff. And I know that's boring. 

I think part of the problem is the protagonist whose perspective I'm taking this from doesn't know what sex is, and think he's walked into a horror movie, so I don't want to write narration to suggest he's that titilated either, while still trying to titilate the audience.
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>>55828082
Can Chris burst in at the end to save Leon, but then demand he continue the Redfield Bloodline?
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>>55827415
Ultimate Showdown, but sex
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>>55794052
Wonder how does this ASOIAF fic goes?
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>>55828339
>How do you write sex scenes
Do you have any favorite stories you read that contain sex scenes? I'd analyze them on how they make their sex works
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>>55828339
https://www.4binz.org/241
This is a guide for smut for the inexperienced.